You wrote this really good. I felt like it happened to me It started off good and got better. I think I repeat myself in every reply to you but there isn't much else I can say. The description, flow, and content were all good...really good. Did you put this in a book or something?

"When I opened my eyes once again
I knew right away where I had been
I looked at the doctor in an original way
Knowing that I would be okay
I was just fine untill a horrible thought
I started to wonder Where you may have been brought
I asked the doctor and couldn't believe what he said
He looked at me, took my hand, and replied "hes Dead"..."

Those were my favorite lines right there.