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You have some talent man, but you need a little elevation. First off, i didn't like how you wrote it. Don't cram 2 lines of your verse into one line on the typing, do 1 line of your song per line, make it look better.
You had some shit from the heart tho, I can tell. Need to elevate a little bit tho. Not much of a good flow, add imagery and edit the flow to start off. Then get into all the technical stuff like multies. You had some in there, but they weren't really nice. They were decent tho. Also, stay away from rhyming words with "ation" at the end. Too played now'a days.
Keep droppin' man, that's the only way you'll get better.
Peep the link titled "America . . . " in my siggy.
pZ!
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