lmao at th esecond ryme,both werent bad,good lil spits,they wer emad shorts thats th eonly problem i could see..but i like ot read long rhymes i get mor einto them that way,but this was aiight for beginnings of shit...shit snice...lmao at the homosex line,i never kne wpeople said homosex lmao ahahha...shit is funny...liked both verses actually,but pick up on th esimilies and metaphors like bash said,and also try to pu tin abit of imagery....but if you eepin it battle rhyming,then there is little need fo rit...keep up dun.
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