before we begin............................................. ........................wagwan....lmao.
ohhhhh n-demik new peiceeeeee......
erm yeah now thats over,illg et to ze critique al le frenchy thingozzzz...
ohhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh. ....
likee.....nice verse dem...but are you saying your ugly???lmao..im only playin....
thi sverse was excellent,n-demik on some love shit...seems strang ebut im lovin git...cupid upgraded his artillery to a spear-gun...excellnt...very nicelly written....the end sold me a t-shirt...ahha shit had me laughin,but thinkin
a tth esame time...the beginign made me smile...the ending made me sad...damn you demik...make up you r mind haha....nah nah it was an excellent verse...i met a girl like that once...but she cheated on me,and i blew her cars up...lmao...living in riyahd you learn a few htings about explosives,shit was fun...but yeah,im gettingoff topic...back to the verse...
beyond th epoitn of bygones....treating me vile dawn...nice nic eline...
were a lurking depression swallows your own pride for you...good imagery there...this heaven sent creature ,with th espanish eyes...very nicely written line...th ewhole peice was well written,but that line...is all you need to explain the person,buetiful spanish eys...that sall you need to picture it...it was so nicely done,at a prfect part of th erhyme,followed by a great line...only a mother could love...almost makes th espanish eyes seem heavenly kinda ina weird way i thought...making it seem like a good hearted person,far from vein,wich is th edownfall of alot of th emore better looking people,swelled egos and obsession for good looks....a faint heart never won h efair maiden...no doubt,he maafucka with the sword that killed th edragons did in most ocassions...i felt like a drop in a bucket,thrown into space...brilliant line.nice imagery,really gets ya...a drop in a bucket is lonely and sad enough,but then in outer space would only duplicate the lonliness and pain of bein gall alone...nice nice line...im in my element before leaving...<good line tha tone...but the cupid artillery spear gun line was excellent,i wont forge ttha tone it was ill...very good descrption of what was felt...anywya i better stop.be three am here...gotta rest my head some...are you goign to be doing this on audio?and f you are are you goign to keep the same voic eon it??prolly but yaknow,it seems so different from the normal type of thing you write,maybe it would be different...anyhow...good verse...very good verse..liked i tmuchly...mucly?...pshh
thanks for posting this,was a decent read for once.
returnt he favour some time
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=50451
i hope thats to my landmines verse...pshh the bar format...haha...
good drop demik...
bismillah
excuse the spellin gmistakes,theres alot fo them,but im seriosuly unable to see my keyboard or screen,i aint slept in two days,pshh.