nice lil battle,
Mos ill came strong, but his verse structure was hard to follow.
He started off with a nice line, to get the reader interested.
Quote:
I’m bout to come correct on Thug WhYtE, who does he think he is Magic/
Mistaken his mic for a wand….now he thinks he can show us a rap trick/
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that was a nice metaphoircal correlation. The rhyme got slow because he structured his rap as if he was doing audio, and not text. You need to use more multies throughout your verse, to keep the reader on there toes, instead of this style, were they glance through the verse, and look at the punches, instead of getting th full effect of your lyrikal onslaught.
Thug Wayne's verse has better structure, even though his punchlines weren't AS strong, his use of multi's made up for it.
Quote:
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Why must you persist to exist on my RB roster of faggots on tha hit list, stagger back, it aint worth movin forward//
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Nice multi's, It seems as your were holdin back, I know that you can come even stronger than that, but this verse was good enough to get the victory.
my vote is for THUG WAYNE
oh yeah, return the favor, and vote on my battlez:-)