The flow was a little rough but I liked what you said in it a lot. Sometimes it looked like you just threw words in to make it rhyme..kind of forced, if that makes any sense. That didn't really matter, I liked this.
"Need ya words of incouragement like you need mine.
Need 2 do my work but can't cause im thinking of you all da time.
It’s funny cathcin myself smiling cause im thinking bout you
Never felt like dis 4, ensures me it’s tru. Wanna be doin dis till my life is through"
I liked that part. I'm feeling that towards a girl I know right now so I felt those lines.
"Gurl hoping someday it'll be you I come home 2 @ night.
If it aint you babe then ill look @ my life and know sometin aint right.
Cause I need everything about you from you head right down 2 your toes
You the thing bringing me up from those really low low’s..,
I didn’t do this on my own baby, it was eachother we chose. We like bros takin on lifes problems like foes. Right"
I was also feelin those lines. You're a good writer. And good luck with this girl you're talking about
