Woah, pretty amazing. I mean, conventional structure aspect aside, there was a lot of emotions in this. And y'know I know how it goes. I know how it goes feeling sad, getting made fun of, and wanting to die and all. It aint pretty. Sometimes I forget but poems like this keep reminding me.

Just one thing... if you wrote this for someone else, I would hope you would want to give them a positive outlook on the situation. Yet you end the poem in death, and that is only going to depress the person you wrote it for even more.

Then again, I doubt you wanna write about puppys, rainbows, and balloons. So... yeah...

~Shalom~

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Originally posted by Bruklor Nec is just dumb

I'm taking that as a compliment.