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Originally posted by The Necromancer
Woah, pretty amazing. I mean, conventional structure aspect aside, there was a lot of emotions in this. And y'know I know how it goes. I know how it goes feeling sad, getting made fun of, and wanting to die and all. It aint pretty. Sometimes I forget but poems like this keep reminding me.

Just one thing... if you wrote this for someone else, I would hope you would want to give them a positive outlook on the situation. Yet you end the poem in death, and that is only going to depress the person you wrote it for even more.

Then again, I doubt you wanna write about puppys, rainbows, and balloons. So... yeah...

~Shalom~

well..i wrote this cuz for some reason i feel what she's feelin but she aint wanna open up so i aint really sure how to end it ya know...but i havent shown her this yet and i aint plannin on giving it to her cuz i know it would definitely make things worse....when i wrote this i cried....i know i know im pathetic but i actually did and at that moment i realized how many times i pity myself for somethin so little but never realize how lucky i am..*sigh* wish she would just talk to me...but i dont wanna get into it ya know...its personal and i wont butt in to anything...

...im really glad u enjoyed this...uppin!