aight.........
here it is.........

not a bad drop but you definately have to work on elevating...

concentrate on extending your lines... as it is now everything seems "nursery ryhmish"

also... when writing songs try to pick a deeper subject matter...
people are tired of reading about I'ma do this and then I'ma do that...
ya know...

so keep elevating...

work on these things and drop your next song in the open mic forum


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