yo, this was good.. the flow needs owrk, but vocab, content, topic, and shit like that were all pretty sound..

"If it makes you feel any better, my cheddar is from no hopers,
I only resort to kids, if im dry, or cash from casual tokers.
You say people of my kind oughta be dead
Ill deal to ya daughter if she a crack head.
Or if ya son gotta gun thinking him and his cliques mean
Ill cap that bastard first don’t care if that faggots only 16."

^ those few lines were ill, ne-way.. all I can give really as a pointer is stay up dawg.. holla

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