if you wanna improve first thing is,your words are good but most off it didnt even rhyme,,second when you get shit rhymin then you wanna put in doubles and punchlines, a double is like, {with out weapons i found away to kill-you...fill you up with mildew.}
a double from mildew is kill-you, a punch line is like, [ your gayer by far such,,flamin ass havin drinks at starbucks] thats a shitty onne but its a punchline.jus take everybodys advice and practice everyday jst sit back throw an instrumental get blazed and freestyle. keep on practicin and postin,keep ya head up,peace god.