this is really short...you should lengthen it up, maybe make a whole song of it. It had a good concept, and I enjoyed the metaphors and vocab. good title...fuck, wicked title.
best fucking line I've heard in a long time:

although im not much for violence...i speak in whispers so i translate in silence//

sweet lord thats awesome
check out my stigmata piece
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