this was the best piece i've seen dropped in open mic on this website so far...the flow was easy to pick up...the wordplay was hot....the mutli's was there...the only thing i didn't like was at the end i think the "greatest" of the whole verse kinda faded out slowly.....the flow started to lack..and the rhyme scheme was hard to read...hmm my favorite line in this would have ta be:

"im physically light headed in this crisis heading from head on
i never meant wrong, but my way with words isn't so head strong"

"this heaven sent creature with spanish eyes should have run
but then stayed to embrace a face only a mother could have loved"

as you can tell some of the first lines.........hmmm i'd say 8-8.5/10