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ok,nice verse from both yall...nice work,your styles seem to go together very well...much similarity...
the vocab wasnt to harsh,or overworked,it seemd you got your points across easikly witht he more simplistic rhyme type...
i liked how the lines were hsort and ending with a long line,just seemed that way to me,but i liked it...nice use of a rhyme scheme.
the suicide part was excellent,even i fyo udie...you still end up on writers block,nicely thought out.liked it alot.
liked how you made writers block seem like an actualy place you get stuck in,sounds depressing like that,an i guess i can understand how annoying and depressing it gets when you get writers block,not being able to think straight to write...pisses me off...especially when you wan tto...and the idea of it being like a cell almost was perfect,nice job...
pen bleeds dry...nice line...cant write an your dyin from it...bleedingdry....thats what i picke dup anyway...
im th efirst child to die on writers block...that was ill...excellent lil song from yall...most these cats havent read it...wouldnt understand if they did im guessing...but liked how you made a topic like getting writers block,deep and personal....very real.
excellent verse,having read it a coule of times,i think i understand th econcept somewhat,i hope im right,very nicely done...