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Old 06-01-03, 03:13 AM   #7
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Originally posted by The Flu
you had a nice i dea but i couldnt keep the flow, it seems like your lines just have to many words in them and it seperates the rhmying to much. you know what i mean?

its like you read two whole sentances and out of the two sentances only two of the words rhyme.

i think if you made the lines shorter it would rhyme better.

just work on that and i think it would be a lot better, you had a nice idea but a song just aint a song if it doesnt rhyme right

thanks for replying to mine.


^^i agree with that. u gotta use more internals. but, dont overdo that shit. i also read u said u should stay on familiar grounds. i think that that would be a good idea. if something works stay with that dont try to do something else. pzz~
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