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Old 06-01-03, 11:40 AM   #30
NewPort
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yo i aint gunna vote cuz me n Game are crew
but i would give this to him none tha less...Close battle,
i think tho....If you want me to tell you wat i mean
cuz you think im d/r than here it goes . . .

Lets start wit JHustler . .

U got lines all over ur rhyme dat just don't make since//
U got alot of shit to say so i will just cut it up wit a japanese quince and u gotta remember u ain't worth 2 cents//

These words you use in here are too commonly put together..Its like lyricist have combined these words together for years and to be blunt, we just get sick of hearing them being replayed over and over. Then you have emcees who just put in shit cuz it sounds good together..you didn't do this completely just giving some friendly advice...

Why did u say justin are u a fag cause u suckin niggaz dick while i'm shoot da mag//
I'll leave u in a body bag while ur clothes lookin like rags while im leavin ur blood tracks//

Lines like that dawg aint gunna get you no where, trust me.
Dont spit shit like that, no one cares to read whack shit like that. No hatin involved just givin you and up on sum shit...Good for a newbie, i'll give it that tho. ..

Now onto Game . . .

Your lyrics bore me they~go~over~again…. If I was pudsy I would be your equivalent//

I liked that line you put in there dawg. however, tha sentence you used afterwards kinda killed it. But i liked the flow and punch you delivered in this. . .

Respect me eh Im the mother fucking god father So be scared im coming out
You lay cheap rhymes its just… disrespectful…. il take my Rif-ul(rifle)and~shoot~u about//

Ight, some of ure ryme had a lot of shit like that rifle line that would confuse someone and damage their flow structure. None the less its an innovative technique to use, but it just wasn't workin for you dawg. The line was a lil bland itself at the same time anyways... The advice i would give to you would be to try and elevate some more, cuz i see potential in both of you, just with time i think you could be top product. Try and improve vocabulary some and sicker metaphors would help you. .

Tha Break Down . . .

Flow: JHustler
Metas: Game
Lyrics: Game
Punches: both
Wordplay: Game

Unnoficial Vote - Game