I'm feelin' what Feebi said... you should change ya name. This shit was sooooooo elementary it's not even funny. You got a LOT of work ta do. Man, you should try an' read some other niggas posts, then do some shit of your own. You need better vocab., better wordplay, everything needs to elevate. You had ONE o.k. set of lines though...

<can u remember wot my ideal ricky d said/>
<my gun and your mouth will be newly wed/>

That was an aight line... best one in the piece. HOLLA.