damn...this was nice dude.
as usual, you have crazy vocab so that I need a dictionary to understand you topic.
your flow seemed off at points, but if this is written for audio, then it'll probably flow to the beat.
I can't wait to hear this in your crazy raspy mad-rapper mofo of a voice. It'll be ill *twitches with anticipation*
good work
Peace

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