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Yeah, i liked a lot Sand. Most definetly deserved (though of course, A22 was good too...)..
The seed meets the flower, hello how do you do
together they construct beauty inside of the the womb
^^Nicely started. Good imagery throughout.
Can i just reccomend you you use "..". Example
The seed meets the flower "hello how do you do"
And also maybe try and put the ".." at the start. Though it can also be pulled off at the end, it's usually ebtter at the front..
..anyway, just thought i'd drop a bit of constructive crit...a bit pedantic it may be..but it does make a difference in one's pieces..
..resp[..
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