you know, I've never really said this in open mic, but I hated this.
nothing personal, I just think that the rhyme scheme was simple,
the flow was off, there was vitually no vocab, it didn't have any
kind of message, and it talked about the same shit every newb
who listens to mainstream spits. It rhymed and everything, so
technically it was a rap, but it was the shittiest one I've read from
someone capable of doing better.
what the hell posessed you to write this? the bars weren't even organized.
shit

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