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Old 06-04-03, 08:21 AM   #6
Dadi Kewl
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Posts: 1,755
From: England
IP:

yo vortex know's the score and i'm sorry i missed the deadline
But let's give him sum feedback on the vers

Quote:
Life on the street is hard,
he'd love getting a Penny for his Thoughts


I thought tha beggining of the verse was a great opener

And the verse was tight, it was true, had wordplay, was creative
and had a good story, the structure was solid and tidy

great stuff, i always enjoy your topical pieces

-peace-