Okay this is my full rhyme so tell me what ya think

Verse 1
feels like its jus 9 months down the drain/
my face dont show the real hearts pain/
feels like its the end of the seeming endless regien/
I dont Know what or how my heart feels/
Unknown if it well get better dunno when it will heal/
my minds more fucked, confused than all of the cast in Ally Mcbeal/
a realationship like a game of darts, throw the dart & hope it hits bullseye/
then if & when it does you'll know cuz you & your partner there till you die/
the tears arent here right now but when you leave tomorrow ye ill cry/
finding the right partner is the hearts primary misson/
sex is just a bye product, so dont find ur partner on sex jus talk n listen/
seems like the time we've been togeather is years/
Ive spent more time with you than all of my peers/
bewdley high school leavers doo class 2003/
in the last picture thats me the one they call the rap guru ye thats me/
the temptation of another girl I jus couldnt over come/
ye from that experience i was pretty dumb/
but ye for my actions ill take full reponceability/
What i did made you angry & was full of negitivity/
now seems like we each gonna go solo/
maybe i can knock myself to you again just like in polo/
people say actions speak louder than words/
but how can love take action so in these words is the only way i can make me heard/
seems im in a boat thats sinking you've already got on the life raft/
ive opened my heart to you on many occastion but now u wana be friends & its jus sounds daft/

Hook
all the small things you did dont go unoticed/
when ive been evil & wrong your mind jus stayed in focus/
the love plague has hit me like a crop to a colective of locus/
i wish sometimes that my life is gonna fail/
if i gave someone a gun let them help me bail/

Hook
all the small things you did dont go unoticed/
when ive been evil & wrong your mind jus stayed in focus/
the love plague has hit me like a crop to a colective of locus/
i wish sometimes that my life is gonna fail/
if i gave someone a gun let them help me bail/

verse 2
The more i think, the more i blink, the more i blink the more my heart sinks/
everytime im around you i keep to think about our apperant "missing link"/
This time im doing this shit infomational like teletext/
& forget everything & just thourght about the raw text/
but still i stray of topic but im here to rap about you/
aaaa so what shall i say cuz u broke my heart jus proving what you can do/
cuz of us annoying each other this is our realastionships end product/
ye the ending is that its beyond recognition ye its fucked/
above all the things ill miss the wings of your compassion/
Ending our realationship like endless amounts changing fasion/
Our memories are all of the same/
still even if we meet who can we blame ? stardom to fame/
metaphoricly speakin with the add cliche/
I dont know when or If my heart will hold the demons at bay/
My mind jus in a parralel universe hope the evils will go away/
But from this experience I know I will live to see & feel a brighter Day/
so lets do this the hard way not crusifying each other/
its like pushing away a sister & pulling in a brother/
I feel like rapin the women & wasting the men/
my minds going away but i dont know if it will come back, again/
I lie to my self saying I aint missing you at all/
but the struggle with the demons leads my body to fall/

Hook
all the small things you did dont go unoticed/
when ive been evil & wrong your mind jus stayed in focus/
the love plague has hit me like a crop to a colective of locus/
i wish sometimes that my life is gonna fail/
if i gave someone a gun let them help me bail/

Interluede
well its an end of an era & it aint fair but all good things come to an end/
Not all things you can hold on to, not all things yo can defend/
but sometime with women & life the best defence is offence/
so tread ladies right when they ask you to do something in the middle of the game dont be dense/