..A New Breed of Femcee..
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Whats up Shizzy. Let me just start off by saying, i dont think you should stop posting here. People are sometimes a little slow, but that doesnt mean that the work isnt worthy, as in this case. Everything I've read from you, I've liked. And this piece was no different. I find it a little hypocritical in some parts, since you've never replied to any of my pieces but yet here I am replying to yours. Anyway tho..
I liked this a lot. And i usually dont like poems i find on here that don't rhyme, because usually the content can not make up for the lack of rhyme..But this piece most certainly did.
I liked how you gave a lot of information and background in a small amount of space, and also how despite the saddended tone of heartbreak in the beginning parts, the end seemed positive, and optimistic.
>>But nevertheless I will go on and the pieces that he lay shattered on the ground will find its place once again
I really liked that line..and of course the ending line:
>>Shattered he left me, and whole he will find me
..Left me sayin "you go girl" in my head. I liked it a lot.
I hope you reconsider not posting here anymore, cuz even tho it seems sometimes like people dont appreciate what you put out, the few who do always make it worth it in their replies and whatnot. Thats what I've learned anyway.
Stay up.
Peace.
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