I enjoyed this a lot. it had a really good meaning, and the whole "painfully dead" theme is great, even thought Mad Man picked it.

there was a bit of repetition, rhyming the same words twice and such. not a bad thing, just makes the rhyme seem a little tedious.
the flow was okay, but wasn't constant. the syllables in your bars should relativly the same length, helps the flow.

the opener was amazing, same with how you twisted it from death to love, and told how they related. nice piece ender.
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