Ripper:

• no personals
• played punches
• hardly good wordplay
• missused present & past tense words made the rhyme senseless
• whole verse seemed bitten or written concidering there is no poerty tourney on this site
• second bulleted item

Marcianno:

• complexity
• hardly no personals either
• kinda good wordplay
• even though adding speaking my name in vain=hate with a passion for him from this day forth

^even with thought of that in mind i think marcianno's verse was better

vote=merc