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Old 06-15-03, 07:08 AM   #3
RythmicTendicies
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^^what he said^^

You had good wordplay and vocab, but some of your lines were a bit long:
"Its about time i drop bombs full of hydrogen,yo its been
good rittens for da less hidden/", try to shorten them:

but overall it was a nice peice!
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