not bad... I was feelin' some of it, not all, but some.. I liked the second verse and the one after the second gun shot the most.. for a biblical piece you could have made it alot deeper an' philosophical.. it was too str8 4-ward for what you were try'n to accomplish... you real need to work on metaphores and wordplay, like.. tip-toe around something without saying it.. nah-m-say'n.. 1

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