From a girls point of view it was real sweet! I jus hope that you can at least halfway sing lol! that girl must be really special for you to wanna take bits and peices of things to tell her how you feel, But (always a but in there some wheres) In certian spots you were comparing her other ppl (ie races) that aint cute! Some times ya flow was off but thats okay cause this piece was from the heart and plus you said the girl got you speechless. All in allI liked it it wsa heartfelt! Keep it up