im pretty new 2 poems myself but i liked it...but there was this i didnt like......

if man fears what he can't understand
then around her i feel no pain

you cud have used that better......"u feel no pain"...meaning what...that u do or dont understand her...sorry i just cudnt get it...u shud of said that u do or dont fear her if u get me...i KNO its wordplay just...i think u cud have used it better...

but it was nice man......wanna see more......1