Tampons are expensive
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the vocab use was very impressive...the art of writing really showed up on this one...i could really break it down for u but it seems to me that its too damn long for me to comment bar by bar...
the content of the poem came out pretty strong...
"the apple out of reach never falls, but seduction is always willing to befriend
these lines get tiring,after all how could you understand such buried emotions"
im awed by these lines...u structured and explain it pretty logical...great job!
"im not being open with the reader which is the authors first obligation
but then again, i can not be held accountable if you dont know what love is"
finishers have always been my faves...cuz its like the major part of the poem...cuz u can always tell how good a poem is by their endings...i loved this one!
nice ..props for that...talent grows...drop more
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<br><br><center>- Shiznit -
- Tampons are still expensive -
- That's a Fact - </center>
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