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Blac Haze.....work on your flow.punches...rhyme scheme..and definitly start using multies.Check in the wackness emergency center...it will help you out a lot......and cut your lines..too long..
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Trying to come with that “lame rhyme”, maybe if I gave this “dame time” he wouldn’t come with the “same rhyme”//
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obviously you have know flow if you have to highlight were it rhymes..If you were gonna use a weak line...you could have cut it to this... Coming with “lame rhymes”, if I gave this kid “dame time” he wouldn’t come with the “same rhyme”//
That would make it not sound so stretched....
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The closest this guy would be to being “Big” is adding an “L” to his record// Big L
Lost and Found this guys looking for his career I hear hes offering a big reward//
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That has no transition.....and your flow makes your medicore punches even more treacherous to read....You need to work on everything....it will all come to you within time if you keep at it....
Macianno's was nothing special....needs work...but definitly got the job done.He has some sort of flow,and yes,punchlines.
[quote]Haze u've seriously miscalculated ur opponent- this battles illegitmate, ur missin several components//
dat verse barely hit me nigga i only got ~nipped~u like a fat kids pants cuz jus waitn 2 get ~ripped~// [quote]
The wordplay is also lacking....obviously Macianno came harder....though you both need to elevate...keep up...
vote=Marcianno