shit was tight and was like raw emotion. U know i like both of yo poems ive read so far, but i have a suggestion, u can ignore it if u want, but i have found that writing freeverse where it doesnt rhyme can really catch hold of peoples mind and put the peace in a more serious mood. just a suggestion, oh u can make parts of it rhyme too but leave some where it doesnt rhyme, this makes it seem really original and it will stand out more. keep up the tight ish fam, peace