not bad at all for ur first drop....

but i just noticed that some lines dont fit and when u read it out loud its just that som words are like off but u really did a good job with freestyle like piece...

dont ever take my constructive critism gets to u...its just that im always a critique when it comes to this....

well..keep droppin..u got potential girl...

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