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A glass mirror in front of me but I cannot see a reflection.
Our lives lived yet meant nothing because deception.
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i liked ur simple description of this...good opening!
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Layed down before you what more could you hope for.
You holding my hand making me want for no more.
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these lines showed ur pain and desire for something...could put metaphor too ya kno....but that was just a thought..its good as it is...
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The aches I feel are not from my own pain.
Insanity lived through us but i remain sane.
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these lines are alright...just basically stating how the pain can lose someone's mind but still fights for it
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Whirpools of suffering that drain the esence of me.
The walls caving in but i'm freed with just one plea.
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i liked how u use "whirlpools" its like its unending...its circles around....and the imagery and metaphor of this is really good...
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Floating through reality but your the only truth.
I'm the baby at the end ready to be soothed.
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the ending is always been my favorite ..but in this case...it left me in daze ..its like its not a good ending...but i liked how the way u did it...props
simple but very creative....love it!