I liked this filed.

Though i felt you were a bit too elaborate at times, especiallyt in terms of the ryhme scene.

But using a kind of simplicity you really bought this piece out to the reader. Especially the way you implemented imagery.

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PS

I will close this thread. When you have LESS THAN 2 pieces on the first page, PM me, Shiznit, Phrantik or Deacon and we will re-open it and up it to the first page. Sorry, not your fault. Rule only started 8 mins ago.