i liked the whole topic. and the story line was good. i think it just needs a little editing in a few places.

i liked the line about "bullets released, but instead of hitting your enemy you took the life of an innocent little kid"

but i didn't really like "I really felt for this mother.....and the boy's family i dont lie" cause it sort of seemed like you were just looking for something to rhyme with "die"

but it was pretty good.

wait, is this a true story or what?

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early man walked away
as modern man took control
their minds weren't all the same
and to conquer was their goal
so he built his great empire
and he slaughtered his own kind
he died a confused man
killed himself in his own mind

we're only gonna die for our own arrogance
that's why we might as well take our time