not bad dude.
this had a crazy rhyme scheme, seemed to rhyme at random, but the flow was good.
Vocab wasn't great, but then, it sometimes takes away from the rest of piece.
Message was weird. Didn't say much, but as battle raps go, this made some good sense, and drilled the message home.
Good length.

favourite lines:

its like premiture ejeculation it hangs on ya mind, never goes away//
some day-s i awake n prey that ma lyrical demons wont show today//

Peace

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