That's what they do here, shiznit..sleep. You being a mod should know. Although I can't talk. I haven't really replied to anyone's stuff yet. But here's my first..

Emotion poured out of this. The vocab you used on this made it a lot better. Whenever I write, my intelligence..or lack of it, shows very much. Instead of using 1000 little words to get your point across you used 1 pretty big one. So I liked that part of it.

The content of it was good. You wrote one of those typical boring love poems in a different way which made it more fun to read.

I liked the set up you had too. 4 lines to a paragraph..I guess they call them paragraphs? Or stanzas? Well anyways, I liked that. They are usually harder to read when all bunched up into one long story with no breaks. So...Good job.