Hey man, I liked it a lot. Topic was good....I dont know if you were tryin to make a point or not becuz your vocab was low and if someone is tryin to make a point, They usually are low on their vocab. Metaphors might help out a little, not all the time though. I liked your rhyme sceme, feel off in some points. This peice was good, I'll give you an 7/10. Nice Drop, Keep Spittin....I'll be sure to check out more of your peices