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Old 07-02-03, 03:06 PM   #5
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irriducubilli
he took this one....Flow was a little off, it changed a lot in places. Punches were alright, I did enjoy reading them. Personals good. Wordplay was good, Work on it a little. Elevation, Join the rest of us.

Thugzdocry
you need to come up with more personals. You need to work on your punches. You had too many Elementary lines. A little Elevation on everything and you'll have it. Just Work on it Kid.

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