Shiznit's Thoughts:

Vocabulary...errrr.not at all good....i mean you used like words that have been used before and its like some plain diss over nothing....well u couldve at least put in a couple of unique and interesting vocabs regarding on how simple it is...but yeh u could work on it

Flow...it wasnt that great either...its pretty damn short and it needs work....

Content....definitely not gonna work...although this is an interesting freestyle...its sounds pretty boring...and if u gonna use this in a battle..the punches are way way below average...u would be KOED in just a snap and u aint really wanna do that...u just gotta have to think of an interesting topic other than wack shit...

OVERALL....it needs work and i know u couldve executed it more better...but hey...we were newbies before too...we started wack too then work on some weak parts then elevate and still elevatin...

p.s
and for the title of ur freestyle...u can say "I need help" hehe

I SAID.

WE elevatin...u should join us!

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