Shiznit's Thoughts:

Vocabulary...well done...very creative and very interesting used of words...

Flow...the beginning was really great but as it gets to the end...some were off but when i read it the second time..it wasnt that bad...but definitely wanna hear this in audio..

WORDPLAY...nice multies..."invision wisdom in my mental prison.//
with medical percision I slit an incision into this game.//" - brilliant

Content...the theme was quite amazing...some r a bit out of my mind but it was alright

OVERALL...definitely good..nice job!

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