Shiznit's Thoughts:

VOCABULARY

>not quite sure about some words that were used cuz like some didnt make sense but it sounded good so u put them in ya kno..

"somebody rape this, duplicate, copy, paste, print and date this, but could neva recreate it" - thats interesting!

FLOW

>im not really sure bout the short then long then long then short then short short then long long....the flow was a bit off like when i read it..i didnt know where to stop or if i would continue reading or maybe think if thats the beginning or the end...well in structuring a piece by its flow...use a bit of rhyme scheme...although its a keystyle or freestyle...the flow have to fit the verse...dont worry u could do it..a little work thats all

WORDPLAY

>how you twist my brain on where to read next is really amazing as a matter of fact its alright...u didnt really put more in it..but if u couldve support some stuf with a couple of metas and multies it would be much better but props..

CONTENT

>the whole theme made this piece really stood out..nice thoughts...

"The forecast not looking to good this week,
and it's real funny, how real sunnys what ya weather man speaks.
I'm flooding the streets, call it the great white river,"

^^^nicely done!

OVERALL...its quite average...could work a little on some parts but yeah..it was nice to read this...

I SAID

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