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Old 07-02-03, 08:08 PM   #2
shiznit
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hmmm...based on what ive read from you so far *ahem* 'anti-matter'...hehe ...i really liked this one...


i had to do this cuz its fun breaking down and shit...*shakes head*..cuz im the only one who doin it so here it goes


VOCABULARY

>good choice of words...BRILLIANT!....some of the words correlate one another and thats a cool ish...

i.e.
"engeniusly i go threw mytoses, produce cell division, and grow another self
hottness times 2 so i know i'll never get left on the shelf"

^^^^see those words im talking about?? madd nice!

FLOW

>very very smooth its like its way perfect to fit the piece...readin out loud makes it even better....i liked it

WORDPLAY

>"occward,...cuz theres muthafuckas lookin like us underground
10% body water ,and speak with anti-matter-waves of sound
a reverse effect in the human brains cerebral cortex
makeing it impossible to transmit after the waves create a vortex"

^^^^enough said...that was hott!

CONTENT

>very creative...it showed really how talented the writer is..hehe

OVERALL

>anti matter rocks! LOL

i wanna see more drops aight?
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