Nice concept...

...though i felt at times it collapsed into carnage...overall i got the jist of it...though i don't think i actually got what YOU as the poet was writing about...

...but yeah, i liked what you tried to do with this piece, it's hard to do...i've done it a couple of times...most go totally wrong...but there's always that one that flows perfect...and comes off well..

..for me, this one was in between...which was kind of weird..

..resp...