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Old 07-03-03, 04:13 PM   #34
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I never saw one constructive vote there at all ...

Heres how you should vote
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M.A.W:----

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yo ThugzDoCry//
bitch get SARS and die//


That was so simple and kinda predictive, a four year old could have thought that one up! , Try abit more wordplay in your opening lines.

Quote:
your crazy you battle me//
cuz' today you'll find your rest like pac and B.I.G.//
you betta escape now B//


Same here, really simple, everyone has used Tupac & Biggy in there battle verses, it got old years ago dawg.

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after votin' you'll have a K.O.//
bitch I can can you in a line, or four//
but I said at least 8 bitch thats twice four//
but to me it ain't a lot more//


Did anyone else understand this bullshit??? , in the first line of this stanza you basicly said he's gonna win...

what you should have put is something like this:-
"After the votin you'll RECIEVE a KO"

Quote:
shit I allready got 10 lines, soon I got twelve//
I bet you are lucky cuz' its only words no shells//


This is the best part of your verse ... never made sense but flowed, unlike the rest of the verse!!!

ThugsDoCry:---

Quote:
If you want to understand my shit...you need some mental back-up..cuz my shit it totaly ~grinded//
Fuck this wigga i'm master ~minded...and like a 'wonder'...you are lyricly ~blinded//


This was nice dawg, nice wordplay, could do with a touch up on the flow though!

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You wannabe lyricist..fuck claiming to be hiphop, all day long listening to punk/rock and ska//
There’s no one to take care of you, I mean also you’re mom diss-like-ya//


Even though the using "MOM" line went out ages ago, you used it well , nice work

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Basic Run Down:---

Flow = ThugsDoCry
Word play = ThugsDoCry
Punchlines = ThugsDoCry
Multis = ThugsDoCry (only a few though)
Enjoyment = NONE
Suspence = M.A.W (only coz i wanted to see wether he had something up his sleave)

OVERALL = ThugsDoCry
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Check out my battle with Iceberg, Thanx