hmmm..*strokes beard*....

...an intriguing piece. Some references i had to think about. Maybe you should clarify some of them using '*'.

But yeah, you came well with this. Though at times i felt you overloaded it with references and complexity (the piece couldn't handle it...to heavilt compressed in a 'structure' that wont hold it...)..

still...i felt parts of it quite well. Especially the first four or so lines which were very well put. Using a simple yet effective 'stop-start' style to, er...good effect..

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