Seemed like a freetype to me...

...was decent enough to. The concept was there. And i could see how you were trying to force it through. Using such things as repitition to echo...

...but i felt you over did it..over elaborating and playing on certain parts a bit too much. Plus you made a few general mistakes. Like when you wrote "cant or cannot".

Still, i can most definetly see that you got potential to elevate much further. The concept, how you tried to write it...

...resp...

PS

I've seen it before. So i got to ask. Who is that in your avatar?