Yo man is this was a Free then it was str8 fire....... if it was written then u need a lil help.. BUT ONLY A LIL (and im only helpin u cos u from UK like me)...
eg
"my rhymins like gillete,im mach3 and leave yall hairless//"

this was kinda corny and pointless.. but it had a good idea to it.. so you cudda said something like this

Im like gillete, when we face to face... il leave your wig split and hairless//

Its got exactly the same idea but makes a lil more sense u feel? but the free/written/song whuteva! was still good.. props 4 UK emcees

could u return the favour and hit this up

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=63749