well....honestly kid if the dude this shyt is meant for decides to respond and only hits you wit one ill punchline it'll be over.
Your vocab is weak, and you don't really have any punchlines in this piece, if this is meant for a battle you really need to rethink this. your flow was in and out at times but thats a matter of opinion b/c you prolly spit this different then i think. but over all this is pretty weak. I give honests crits and if i sound harsh it's because you responded to one of my joints and didn't give me no real critique and that shyt pisses me off.

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